Video production feedback

Title credits are carefully edited using an effective font. The audio is of a pack of cards being dealt and a gunshot and this has been sourced and edited with the title to create meaning.    Text then indicates meaning in the first frame identifying items used in the game. This provides an enigma as the audience is intrigued to find out what the objects mean. An audio track provides further layer of meaning indicating a conversation in the room, diegetic sound. Not supposed to be like that as meant to be a conversation in another room. Leads to confusion. Buzzing sound of a fluorescent light is added to create the ambient sound of the room. The harsh edits are meant because the effect wanted is of an amateur video recording the items.  The narrative moves to the room where the game is taking place and then to a flashback of what the character is discussing and the events that give rise to him arriving at the club.

Ambition is shown in choice of shots. One successful shot is from inside a drawer with appropriate props. There are cuts of shoes from under the bed which are edited to show passage of time.

Shots of the character outside need white balancing, and the shots need to be steady. Use lighting when shots are dark. The audio indicates what is happening but selective editing is needed.

The card game is set up using a good location and the conversation is edited with audio linking shots, sound bridges. Good use of mise-en-scene and a range of shots are used.  The shot of the card turning over are experimental is ambitious but does not quite work as the edit after is too jarring. Another shot attempts to evoke the camera being a bottle. Although ambitious and creative more conventional camerawork would allow the narrative to have clarity. A point of view shot works well. A final shot uses a slow zoom edited with black pace and an industrial soundscape as the character waits for his doom. I advise that the rules need to be learned before they are broke and for this task we are looking for technical skill to be demonstrated.

The narrative remains unclear and re-editing or responding to feedback may allow clarity.  Technical skills are sufficient to allow level 3 as proficiency is shown in editing audio with images with some imagination.

Some focus issues could be addressed, white balancing. 28/40